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Free verse № 43204

Paranoia

by lastobelus

Member since 2003 · Posted 9 Mar 2003 · Edited 7 Feb 2004 · 8 comments

All day long I done the fun-shun run but one come cunning anyhow and took what was mine! all that serious- ness did me nought... so then it comes: puhnoya p-schwa-schwa-neu-schwa creeps like that egg-in-the-hair joke over me and desire and belief 'n' all the what-not I need runs together out the bottom of my feet leaving me cold. uh-oh No one tells what the judgement was, what was decided but all were clearly watching - some looked away or even they were grinning. -- it is this thing, this grinning what's come over me, around me, everywhere this grinning until it comes one day up too difficult to say or keep inside me (duly scribbling their evaluation in notebooks) 'n I say fuck it and run.

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8 comments

[8] Shardik 9-Mar-03/4:16 PM Reply
You're funny, somehow i recognize the writing a bit. Then again my mind is an odd device i recognize everything and nothing. take an 8, because i just can't tell anymore.
[n/a] lastobelus › Shardik 10-Mar-03/4:33 PM Reply
oh, everything I do is extremely derivative. ya know, I read something 'n' get all excited, and then later I puke up some derivative form of what I read. I don't aspire to be a poet, they have to work too hard, I see myself more as a Regurgitationist.
[3] Jimbo 10-Mar-03/4:16 PM Reply
Why doesn't the first letter of each sentence start with a capital letter? I thought that was proper English?
[n/a] lastobelus › Jimbo 10-Mar-03/4:26 PM Reply
'cuz I'm lazy
[10] daniella 11-Mar-03/10:26 PM Reply
ee cummings come uppens!
[8] Robert K Foster 14-Mar-03/9:22 AM Reply
reminded me of some of the DaDa poetry--I like the egg in the hair reference. You've captured paranoia here.
[n/a] lastobelus › Robert K Foster 14-Mar-03/9:26 AM Reply
cummings was my first poet, first literary love. Still shows up in my Regurgitationalism from time to time. Paranoia's easy for me to capture, since I have it.
[10] zodiac 7-Feb-04/9:44 PM Reply
What can I say? You sound pretty peppy about it anyway.