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selfish

Member since 2002 · Posted 6 Apr 2003 · 9 comments

When I drew a line around what was mine the way you had always done when we were kids-- like when we'd fight over the joystick and play space invaders up past our bedtime with no understanding of the miasma of metaphors we were winding, binding, hiding in our seething ids-- and you, you never would let me win. Once I drew that line, I didn't want any of it, only you.

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[7] -=SeTTle=- 6-Apr-03/9:19 PM Reply

Dude if your brother used you as a fucktoy this isn't the place to tell the world. It's best to keep these things secret and to ourselves. The shame is yours and yours alone. Liked 3rd stanza best.

[9] JackCrawley 6-Apr-03/10:40 PM Reply

S'good. I like it. Most people come across as pretentious or psuedo-intellectual when they use words like "miasma," but you manage to make it work, and I have to respect that.

[0] asimpleman 7-Apr-03/7:56 AM Reply

Please get a life or a sugardaddy to bang u slut....

[n/a] Frass › asimpleman 7-Apr-03/8:38 AM Reply

And to think my brother's band is named 'Simple Man'!#! Dear ASM, please feel free to follow your own advice.

[0] asimpleman › Frass 8-Apr-03/4:01 PM Reply

Its hightime u followed my advice too before u end up writing crappy poems like the above. By the way most of the poets u like suck anyway.......ever heard of Ted Hughes,John Keats.......

[n/a] razorgrin › asimpleman 9-Apr-03/12:04 PM Reply

Dude, you're so much of a wiener all I can do is laugh.'U' are a sad little boy.

[0] asimpleman › razorgrin 11-Apr-03/3:50 AM Reply

thats funny coming from a shithead like u......hahaha

[n/a] razorgrin › asimpleman 11-Apr-03/3:28 PM Reply

oh dear gawd no! The illiterate twerp is trying to really uncreatively insult me! Whatever shall I do? Look Chuckles, 'm better at this than you, so don't try. I've seen many a teenybopper flamer like yourself attempt to out-heckle me and they all failed. In short, your kung fu is nothing compared to mine, so give up. Get a hobby, go outside and play, jerk off to avril lavigne, just wait until you're a little older and better armed before you get into verbal sparring matches. Hugs 'n' kisses!

[8] Settle 20-Aug-03/6:10 AM Reply

A joystick isn't really something you should be fighting over. Although strong like a horse's leg, it can be also delicate, like a flower wrapped in silk. 8.