poemranker ::John Denver's hang-glider by horus8

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Free verse № 49120

John Denver's hang-glider

Member since 2002 · Posted 15 May 2003 · 5 comments

Bobbing fluorescents... Hot pink, electric blue nylon Wing, waves, slight breeze... Sunset, albatross eyeing up the situation. Always looking out for a lazy moment to preen and then one leg. Spanning the remnants of music and water. I can vaguely hear a blowhole off in the distance. If I was not so hypothermic and disoriented. Treading for my life. I bet I could even imagine how its spray might feel; if my saturation currently was instead a desert, a dune, a Gila monster's paradise, and me oh my oh was not so awash with thirst in sun burnt laziness. Is that a dingy dinging? The bark of a sea lion? The fin of a Maeko shark? When I last hugged a tree? It was for dear life. I had been on peyote for days, and I was convinced that if I squeezed hard enough. It would pull me in for good. Current, riptide, undertow. All fine examples of secret movement. Moon, blood, women. Yes, I'm awake. More bright eyed and bushy tailed then that hare who shunned holes for pipes and slippers with drumsticks. Fast, but not proud. A warm milk spoiled. Cycles, poles, reproduction. In my past life I was a square boulder from Mu. Then some surly native went and carved me into a giant head with exaggerated ear lobes and lips. Doomed to fall face first. I did.

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5 comments

[10] Ranger 16-May-03/8:02 AM Reply
Glorious.
AT LAST THE COLLEGE HAS UNBLOCKED THE RANKER!!!
I am now in a generous mood, have a ten on the house.
[10] Shardik › Ranger 16-May-03/9:57 AM Reply
Oh, come now, you have to admit... this poem is damn tricky smart. Let's not pass it off on College governor liftings.
[8] richa 16-May-03/10:21 AM Reply
Such a diverse use of language,
Most poems on here are so prosaic
this is more psychadaelic and exciting
[10] Bill Z Bub 19-May-03/4:06 PM Reply
Great stuff.
"All fine examples of secret movement."
Here's a tenner. Don't spend it all in one place.
[10] hipster flare 30-Oct-03/6:11 AM Reply
An excellent Poem (But I do believe it is "Hang" Glider)
It reminded me of a thing I read in a book somewhere--where a man was about to drown and was rescued at the last moment. He was upset because he finally was about to find out what it feels like to be a drowning man, and he was now robbed of that experience.