poemranker ::Let Me Breathe by Felzpoet

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Free verse № 49375

Let Me Breathe

by Felzpoet

Member since 2003 · Posted 18 May 2003 · 3 comments

I need to be let go Let the pain inside out I can’t let you go I need the truth to come out The pain inside grows still It clenches my heart, I can’t breathe I need you to be in my life still Let me breathe I don’t know why you do this to me This pain inside makes it hard to live No I can’t let you do this to me But I need you in my life to live You don’t want me in your life Don’t you know I need you to breathe Without you there is no meaning to my life Let me breathe I need you in my life to let me breathe I need you by my side to let me breathe I want to again to be able to breathe LET ME BREATHE

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3 comments

[3] Bill Z Bub 18-May-03/5:54 PM Reply
The breathy bits are okay, but this piece needs some clearasil, STAT!
(Don't mind the arrogance, it's just the thing to do) ;)
[3] Bill Z Bub › Bill Z Bub 18-May-03/5:59 PM Reply
On second thought, sometimes I'm just too kind. (How's THAT for arrogance?)
[n/a] INTRANSIT › Bill Z Bub 18-May-03/8:20 PM Reply
Oh come on. Bake a Cherry pie Billy boy. Oh wait, I see that you have.