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Detox

Member since 2002 · Posted 20 Jun 2003 · 2 comments

Once heated spoons Split open balloons Legs gone numb A pacifier thumb Left out in the hall He sleeps against a wall Tears on that large frame All arguments are so lame Help is a pitiful cry There comes no soft reply No words for him, this Man in his own piss I swore never to talk to you again I have signed less serious oaths in pen I meant to hear nothing more about you But now what the hell can I do? Not to leave him cold, But no I'm not sold It still breaks my heart But I need some part Pick him up by his thick arms Calm his shakes with some Lucky Charms First food in what must be days I can only hope he stays

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[9] INTRANSIT 20-Jun-03/6:52 AM Reply
Read it aloud to yourself and grind off the speed bumps. They're small but will make it better to read.
[10] horus8 20-Jun-03/10:25 AM Reply
GQT