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Free verse № 53985

Untitled

Member since 2003 · Posted 25 Jun 2003 · 4 comments

Your smile is malevolent. A sneer is permanently plastered on your lips. Your eyes take me to a place ventured by few, Your eyes- a piercing, gray slate. Gray eyes, with a trace of icy blue, Cold and impending, Unreadable to all, All but me. I see the hurt and pain That flash in your eyes when you think no one is around. The burden placed on your heart is evident When searched for in the depths of the pools of callous gray. You hide your feelings well. To you, feelings are a weakness. No one can see past the brick wall around your heart. If only they can see what I see when I look into your eyes.

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4 comments

[4] <{Baba^Yaga}> 25-Jun-03/3:30 PM Reply
The title should be.

Wheatgerm works.
[5] DurtKL 25-Jun-03/9:14 PM Reply
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[9] SupremeDreamer 25-Jun-03/11:22 PM Reply
hrmm. good.
[9] Brian Tiensvold 25-Jun-03/11:25 PM Reply
yeh yeh... good good ... i like it. !!!