poemranker ::12673 Jalepeno ave. Chino, Ca. by Jeremi B. Handrinos

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12673 Jalepeno ave. Chino, Ca.

Member since 2003 · Posted 6 Jul 2003 · Edited 19 Dec 2003 · 10 comments

I drove by your old house yesterday. There was a young couple inside with a baby & people milling about smiling. I thought about how we used to hide in those junipers out front & play truth or dare as an excuse to get familiar with our bodies. I sat there across the street and finished up my cigarette An old man inside shot me a look Then abruptly closed the curtains. The house was smaller without you.

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10 comments

[10] DreamerSupreme 6-Jul-03/1:10 PM Reply
damn.. i cant say anything else.. 10.
[n/a] Jeremi B. Handrinos › DreamerSupreme 6-Jul-03/9:06 PM Reply
I'm flattered, thank you.
[n/a] SupremeDreamer › Jeremi B. Handrinos 7-Jul-03/4:31 PM Reply
Dont see why, but your welcome. ;)
[9] OneFingerAnswer 6-Jul-03/2:48 PM Reply
I like this the best out of the series. Keep going by all means.
[n/a] Jeremi B. Handrinos › OneFingerAnswer 6-Jul-03/9:07 PM Reply
Thank you, I just may.
[9] Shuushin 20-Dec-03/7:04 PM Reply
Yep. It put me in the moment.

Somehow I found myself trying to think of a different last line. I don't know if it was me enjoying the aftertaste; imagining possibilities/extending the vision - or a hunger pain.

Did you try other ones?
[9] Shuushin › Shuushin 20-Dec-03/8:04 PM Reply
I think I've been there, it's not part of my "rounds" - any good?
[9] Shuushin › Shuushin 20-Dec-03/8:27 PM Reply
Okay - what the hell, I'm a member. Just joined a contest.
[10] <{Baba^Yaga}> › Shuushin 20-Dec-03/10:09 PM Reply
Great, see you there. I'm getting a little tired of this place since I fucked my mom. Good luck on your contest. You'll find the competition there dreadfully retarded but eh.
[9] Shuushin › <{Baba^Yaga}> 21-Dec-03/5:54 AM Reply
Well - as long as your mother stays...

;O)