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Free verse № 56270

thought & memory

Member since 2002 · Posted 14 Jul 2003 · 9 comments

In thought, eyelids shut, I can see static like a secret satellite signal beam to my bleary brain or a prototype video game, my virtual life. And memory a laconic raven perched amid allfather's wayworn strands; hard, leeched, with dusted pinion, expiry passed, less cogent or material but in lurking quietude over endless blank lines, the peregrine pen invokes the infinitesimal and for one effulgent second these holed and drafty walls drop away.

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9 comments

[7] Rodavlas 14-Jul-03/2:38 PM Reply
abyss-like. (deep)
[10] thepinkbunnyofdoom 14-Jul-03/4:24 PM Reply
This tickles the little hampster running on a wheel in my brain's nut sack. -10-
[n/a] <~> › thepinkbunnyofdoom 14-Jul-03/9:41 PM Reply
nut sack, hind foot--it's all pink and fated, to me.
[9] Tahlia 14-Jul-03/5:54 PM Reply
Well written piece, great talent.
[n/a] <~> 14-Jul-03/9:40 PM Reply
BILL!! do not tickle these deities!! the are violent, and virulent.

drop the great; embrace the mundane. you will love me for it.

x, z
[8] richa 15-Jul-03/3:42 AM Reply
nice fast flow and good word selection. I prefer verses 2 and three, the first uses surfaces that appear quite decadent
[8] god'swife 15-Jul-03/10:15 AM Reply
I have a problem with 'infinitesimal'. Otherwise perfect, especially the last stanza.
[n/a] Bill Z Bub › god'swife 15-Jul-03/5:40 PM Reply
Thank you. How about "unseen"?
[10] deleted user 1-Oct-03/8:10 PM Reply
"invokes
the infinitesimal
and for one effulgent second
these holed
and drafty walls
drop away."
I like a read with interesting wording. This was quite a poem. You remind me of some one close to me...I'll show you a sample of his work..

The July night spit and cracked in its black eye,
its black iron pot; black boots rout sand
on a beach whose shadows revolve, roll about
like fat citrus at dawn’s red skin. Fork-split;
my father died this night.
In a Texas tumbleweed—tumble,
was the cement, the man, the moon.

I do not tote his flag, carry visions across
the years as tinder
into flames.
Hell is too abundant. It pumps through tubes
and cavities in snow-banked gullies,
sweet waters of Hungarian streams.
I have taken it up. I am all mouth—

he taught me this with bony spindles, contours.
Off a mountainside, I recall. Forget, forget;
suicides, contusions, edges—
forget since you can not.
Black boots stretch and moan on the concrete,

in the black eye; I fit them tight
as a casket, right as a dead man’s
son.

We were both published in the same zine. I admire his work as I do yours. I'm sure I messed up his structure though. ;)