poemranker ::The First Proper Evening of Summer by [mojo]

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Free verse № 5840

The First Proper Evening of Summer

by [mojo]

Member since 2002 · Posted 23 Jul 2002 · 5 comments

It's a matter of colours, And resonant sounds, Reds, blues and greens, Of pleasant hues and tone, So that everything seems, Compatible as a whole, Harmonious to the eyes The ears and the soul, A vista, A light cooling sea breeze, Like a caressing whisper, Ice in a drink, "plink", Simply the way I think, On Summer evenings, In shirt sleeves.

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5 comments

[5] kawakurdi 23-Jul-02/1:54 PM Reply
and resonant sounds- sounds dissonant. The rest is fine.
[7] deleted user 24-Jul-02/1:19 AM Reply
like the title and the last two lines best.

Might cut some.
[6] pete 25-Jul-02/1:11 PM Reply
yeah ... the last two lines or three negated feelings of ? irritation ? at awkwardness ..compatable as a whole seemed to grate til i started with that line as a new breath/beat .. is that why there is a comma after seems in the previous line ?
[6] Tarquin De La Bog 13-Aug-02/5:51 PM Reply
This kind of poem is a safe bet. 6. Very mediocre, I think a 12 year old could do as well, but the simple yet emotional images of a summer childhood means that everybody can't help warming to the poem. So, and as much as I would like, I can't give too low a score.
[2] poetandknowit 20-Aug-02/3:23 PM Reply
Awesome title, but the poem doesn't do it one bit of justice.






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