Severed

Member since 2003 · Posted 4 Sep 2003 · 4 comments

My eyes wax dim [From your hollow truths] And the screams within Fade [to silence] My breath is corrupt ...Tainted [with rust] And I keep hoping Hatred will bow [to love] [In this beautiful abyss] [Of immortal anguish] You can hear me Praying [for solace] Father, I love you I love you, Mother.. My soul aches [To see you severed] I cannot bear these Callused emotions Syncopated symphonies And endless tears [Of your broken matrimony] T.J.L age 14

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[8] deleted user 4-Sep-03/6:36 PM Reply

Very vivid imagery! Well done. :)

[10] tadpole 25-Nov-03/12:01 PM Reply

whoa! love it

[10] that_funny_girl 7-Mar-05/4:17 PM Reply

i give this a 10 because it is good, but i must ask why you included your age - it doesnt really make any difference at all how old you are - and it just seems to give the impressions that want almost a pity vote, for being younger than the rest of us
-nessa

[n/a] zodiac › that_funny_girl 9-Mar-05/4:27 AM Reply

How many poemranker users are you?