Man & Woman

by Mona Lisa

Member since 2003 · Posted 18 Sep 2003 · Edited 18 Sep 2003 · 7 comments

All women want hugs Some men just want what follows, What follows......neither !

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[8] richa 18-Sep-03/5:15 AM Reply

Like the logic of this, the play on words, the two different follows

[n/a] Mona Lisa › richa 18-Sep-03/7:42 AM Reply

Out by 1 syl on line 3 have u any ideas?

[n/a] god'swife 18-Sep-03/11:00 AM Reply

huh? the last line doesn't make sense to me. You're also taking a risk when you say "All women" is that ever true?

[8] richa 18-Sep-03/11:20 AM Reply

I prefer the first one even though it was not strictly a haiku. (3rd line what follows is neither)

As for 'all women', I did think that was a bit generalist. But the power of this poem is its logic how the 3rd line concludes the premises of 1 and 2.

Sorry I can't help

[8] richa 18-Sep-03/12:05 PM Reply

the 6-7-6 one was better.

Now the first line sounds like all women rather than all they want.

And the third destroys the flow a bit.

Sorry I couldn't help, maybe if you put the first version on and asked for help someone might have an idea

[n/a] deleted user 19-Sep-03/1:46 PM Reply

I am against Gaysie Marriage too. What will they want next, free penises?

[10] Bachus 16-Nov-03/1:47 AM Reply

I know the feeling. I'm a male prostitute.