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Free verse № 69376

Working man lament

Member since 2002 · Posted 9 Oct 2003 · 4 comments

Same shit, new day, I'm up and out. There is no time for coffee, is this what it is all about.. Is this what it's all about? My journey's long, and my day is hard. But cigarettes and joking, thats what gets me through. Then theres the thought of you.. You make it right, you make it ok, thanks to you I'm ready for another day. another day, low pay. We reap what we sow, guess we sow what we reap. I fall in line with all the other sheep. 5 to 9.. With all the other sheep? One day I will, someday I say. Till then I struggle, for opportunity is just a step away. And till then what the hey! You make it right, you make it ok, thanks to you I'm ready for another day. The thought of you makes the pain go away..

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4 comments

[8] irishfolksuicide 9-Oct-03/2:15 PM Reply
how sweet, life is shit she makes it (a bit) better

somehow chillingly reminiscent

the rhyme with sheep is a bit daft though
[8] Shuushin › irishfolksuicide 9-Oct-03/8:04 PM Reply
I really think that rhyme with sheep, then the refrain adds a central charm; you should prolly keep that.
[8] horus8 9-Oct-03/7:49 PM Reply
Special K.
[8] Shuushin 9-Oct-03/8:03 PM Reply
Simply put and to very good effect; I like it. I like it alot.

Just a hint of an ars poetical self depreciation too - I said I liked this already, right?

Is damn good. 8 from the East German.