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Go On a Business Trip

by abecedarian

Member since 2002 · Posted 22 Oct 2003 · 8 comments

Brazil, France, Germany, Japan Spent several days each place To feel each in turn to feel the others No vacation I was on a business trip Auf Geschäftsreise That what business may lead To know thyself To know the rest Brings stronger allies New markets to explore A vision of the future And you within it Forget vacation A broken promise in waiting Go on a business trip instead And you will come back New

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[9] <{Baba^Yaga}> 22-Oct-03/3:06 PM Reply
I've never done one really. At least as far as the left brain's definition of one goes.
[n/a] abecedarian › <{Baba^Yaga}> 22-Oct-03/3:15 PM Reply
I think your right brain's left ear is more attune to my intent here.
[6] ?-Dave_Mysterious-? 22-Oct-03/3:58 PM Reply
I know how you feel, I am always jet-setting around the globe: Huddersfiled, Slough, Tunbrige Wells... Boy, it never ends.
[n/a] Wobble McFly › ?-Dave_Mysterious-? 23-Oct-03/3:32 AM Reply
Me too. I had to go to Slough last week. I have to go to Northampton tomorrow.

Have you seen the "Crap Towns" website?

http://www.craptowns.com/html/frontsection/craptowns/30_5/england.htm

"If a town if best described by it's people, then Leicester is a large drunk man throwing chicken burger wrappers into the street."

[n/a] Geschäftsreise 22-Oct-03/5:15 PM Reply
Hmmm. I think the pressed shirt imagery is enabling a more literal read than I intended.

'To what business may lead to know thyself,
go on a business trip'.

This poem is meant as the aquisition/appropriation of a tidy concept with the subsequent fragmentation and repackaging into a marketable value added product.
[n/a] INTRANSIT › Geschäftsreise 22-Oct-03/6:21 PM Reply
Stop stealing from Dilbert!!!! Or Bob the dinosaur will appear and give you a wedgie. :)
[7] richa › Geschäftsreise 23-Oct-03/7:44 AM Reply
Thats certainly how I read it, so the poem has certainly done its job(to follow on your metaphor)
[10] http://mulberryfairy 23-Oct-03/6:01 PM Reply
Nice little moral of the story there at the end, I know what you mean.