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On Visiting My Father

Member since 2002 · Posted 4 Nov 2003 · Edited 10 Nov 2003 · 6 comments

If I wasn't at your funeral There's no way I could know That you're locked inside a casket Somewhere down below. It looks so dead and vacant In this corner of your newfound home, But I'm not too sure it'll help when they finally place your stone. The grass is brown and withered As are the leaves beneath my knees While I watch the prayers I whisper As my breath begins to freeze. The sun casts winter shadows which slowly envelope me, As I pray for the soul of a dead man In the shade of a lifeless tree.

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[10] Wobble McFly 5-Nov-03/5:48 AM Reply
Poemeranker has been flooded with a deluge of "dad" and "dead dad" poems in recent days.

I refer you to the hugely poignant poem "Fathers" by amielou82:

http://www.poemranker.com/poem-details.jsp?id=73528

Full marks for keeping to this socially important theme!

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[10] deleted user 6-Nov-03/6:19 AM Reply
love the poem, best one I read 2day <10>
[10] Katzclear 9-Nov-03/10:20 AM Reply
Aww that's sad. Is Bratsy's uncle your dad?
[n/a] sliver › Katzclear 9-Nov-03/10:23 AM Reply
Ya, she writes about him alot too.
[10] electroman1979 16-Nov-03/7:39 PM Reply
great poem, i miss him too, 10
[10] deleted user 19-Nov-03/3:54 PM Reply
Wow Sliver! That is THY best poem i have ever heard! I don't agree with the point system either, but i will state it simpler then Rockmage-- it should go to one million. You said my poem deserves 1000, and it describes him well - this deserves 1 million.... awesome poem----- 10/10