New Leaf

Member since 2002 · Posted 1 Jan 2004 · 5 comments

As does the fog of the bay creep he comes to blanket me and all my usual worries do not matter now as I revel in the beauty that lies in the sight of him asleep And so the walls I built erode to debris My only defense is a pile at my feet I'm turning a new leaf He drifts along in the upsweep of a stream that empties into me and he takes refuge in my keep and all my usual worries do not matter now as I'm watching him asleep And so the walls I built erode to debris My only defense is a pile at my feet And this is a battle I will not retreat I'm turning a new leaf

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[9] titan69 2-Jan-04/1:24 AM Reply

I like this poem.
Be strong turn over that new leaf
and you will overcome your fears.

[8] tuthaliash 2-Jan-04/10:15 AM Reply

Interesting syntax in the first couple of lines...I found myself wanting more of it. Still, very nice...I haven't heard such a pleasant, concise description of the willing vulnerability of love in some time.

[n/a] dragonfly › tuthaliash 2-Jan-04/11:01 AM Reply

Thanks for the comment. I wanted to capture that feeling of "willing vulnerability," as you put it. It's incredible how much a person can change once they find someone who is right for them. The moment when other people began to notice the glow in my face served as the inspiration to write this.

[8] richa 2-Jan-04/12:47 PM Reply

Kind of pretty. Sight of him asleep is a bit worn though. And what has leaves got to do with anything.

Good though.

[n/a] dragonfly › richa 2-Jan-04/12:56 PM Reply

hehe, i guess the metaphor didnt come through well. I was trying to use the image of a tree turning a new leaf as a symbol for a change within a person.