poemranker ::Respiration for a Lack of Dizzyness by fevriere

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Free verse № 88940

Respiration for a Lack of Dizzyness

Member since 2004 · Posted 16 Feb 2004 · 1 comment

An insignificant barely-swimming almost-warning-coloured pulpy romance, A short-breathed juice gulp, a cold goldfish, A cigarette - but most intense and perfumed like a dazzling queen for in my lungs our mixed breath is short yet fills my entire body so I gamble off my balance into a smoky lie of you (oh how I will laugh when I can breathe rightly once more)

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[8] Shuushin 17-Feb-04/6:30 PM Reply
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