Passion is

Member since 2004 · Posted 27 Feb 2004 · 4 comments

Outside I am watching futilely for a very long time and life goes round like prose and just as "I DEMAND to know the Narrator" I know that all will c o l lapsePASSION ISasPASSION DOES and everything wrong (secrets spring up like wildflower weeds, coughing up accidental clandestine blooms) soon everyone will know and someone will taste the whispering song people will know I thinkthatPASSION ISas passion does so "STROKE ME " I admit.

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[8] richa 27-Feb-04/10:14 AM Reply

How adorable to read a poeme about passion from one of poemrankers Christian Youth.

(the collapse thing is a bit naff and 'stroke me'?)

[n/a] fevriere › richa 28-Feb-04/12:26 AM Reply

Bollocks, I thought it would be scorn-worthy (so why post?, you wonder. I'm sure you can answer that a few ways yourself). It's so straightforward. Did you really give it an 8? I feel a contradiction has been expressed. Possibly?

[8] richa 28-Feb-04/3:11 AM Reply

The first few lines show a certain potential. 'Outside I am watching and life goes round/ like prose and just as'

The rest is a bit off, but reading the entire submissions of a day. Something like this sticks out.

[n/a] fevriere › richa 29-Feb-04/7:24 AM Reply

So is that good? Not damning, I guess. I think you just like reading a poem with unpredictable linesbreaks and big spaces.
But maybe I'm wrong about that. ;D Well, that's constructive, at least. Ta.