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Free verse № 94380

Men & Forget me not's

Member since 2003 · Posted 17 Mar 2004 · 1 comment

Man is no open bouquet And blooms only in himself. He is beauty fed by filth Soiled by being grounded. He has seeds but no roots Sits in a vase of pixels Envying forget me not’s Amok in freedom In cots of color. Dressed to the nines in nine to five He bleeds in to water Under strip lights barely alive Bowing his overgrown but once proud head To curled petals on the filing cabinet Keen to be admired Always replaced And more alive when dead.

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[8] richa 18-Mar-04/1:30 AM Reply
Good, like the first verse especially. Sounds right, metaphor carried through.

Don't really understand the final line though.