You are a Fool, Dad

Member since 2004 · Posted 27 Mar 2004 · 3 comments

We're only related by blood not by personaility or by love. You've hurt me in the past I see it all now. When I was born you weren't there to hold me. Or to say Happy Birthday. When I was only 1 my life had just begun I was told you neglected me and left me alone all day long. I remember you banging on the windows when I was only 2. no one would let you in. Because you were a fool.

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[6] Shuushin 28-Mar-04/6:20 AM Reply

Too simplistic; I don't buy it.

The 1/begun rhyme did it in.

[6] Shuushin › Shuushin 28-Mar-04/6:21 AM Reply

I will say though, the title rocked, and the first stanza started out pretty well.

[5] deleted user 28-Mar-04/9:32 AM Reply

You have a good theme here, just cloak it a little more and it becomes interesting.