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I Have A Love

Member since 2003 · Posted 31 Mar 2004 · 4 comments

I have a love. This moment has been imagined from every angle in my mind. I saw him in every colour, every shape, every place, every kind. And now heâs here and heâs like nothing I could have guessed. His hair is shorter, as is his stature, even the way heâs dressed. He doesnât rescue me from pirates Or whisk me off to the coast. He doesnât shower me with presents Or read me poetry he wrote. But he does tickle me until I canât breathe And he makes sure Iâm ok When I think about I canât believe But itâs so much better this way I have a love And he loves me I have a love And so much more I have a love And heâs not perfect But neither am I, for sure So Iâll take my love and my darling (Though heâd kill me if he heard that title was his role) And close my eyes to the small quarreling And instead open my heart to his soul

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[8] Shuushin 31-Mar-04/8:24 PM Reply

(no title in body please).

Actually a little twist there in the second to last line. Sounds (the situation) so wonderful but then there is this little shadow of doubt (the quarreling).

Would be nice to exploit this more. Something like "He's so thoughtful and kind and everything is so wonderful except for the way he stares at my sister's ass when he thinks I don't see" kindof thing.

[7] New Life Drug 31-Mar-04/10:09 PM Reply

its cute

[10] <Wankster> 1-Apr-04/2:00 PM Reply

I enjoyed it immensely

[7] deleted user 1-Apr-04/4:37 PM Reply

I was off-put in the very first line because I have never "imagined from every angle in my mind." It's a bit much. But as you move along, it's quite sweet, and I'm quite jealous.