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Lemons Don't Grow

Member since 2003 · Posted 10 Apr 2004 · 6 comments

Please don't bring me down I'm growing to tall Please don't bring me down Your short posture is killing me (its knife is sharp for its kind) Find a tissue to be your ladder Wipe the liquid from your face Spawn solids so you won't sink When you try to stand on them (you'll grow up) Kill the ocean; don't help it Your salty onions could feed a million fish Standing still forgot how to grow And walking forgot how to wait for the other (standing still soul) Your face it to red I can't look at you You were stung by the other bee The bee who could see (where he was going) I was blind; I could not see what I had Finding this place was accidental - I was lead by the sadness Just looking for happiness I guess irony could be the case from both of us (We both bleed from the wound I created)

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[6] Shuushin 10-Apr-04/7:58 PM Reply
"to" s/b "too"

"Your face [is] [too] red"

"salty onions" is an interesting idea. But, man - this is wordily convoluted - whats it all mean?
[n/a] Blindpoetry › Shuushin 10-Apr-04/10:11 PM Reply
the poem, itself, just expresses my hurt feelings from an old relationship from a time ago...

It means I'm in grief and sorry for the sadness I started...

...I think, anyways....
[n/a] Blindpoetry › Shuushin 10-Apr-04/10:12 PM Reply
..and yeah - I seem to like to write my poetry in a rush and huridly edit it... Thats a bad habit that I need to fix.
[n/a] deleted user › Blindpoetry 11-Apr-04/8:33 AM Reply
It's not a bad habit. But why post before it's ready?
[n/a] Blindpoetry › deleted user 11-Apr-04/11:07 AM Reply
I lack the ability to catch small mistakes maybe?

I'd think its done - until after posting do I see more mistakes...
[9] dancin_n_da_moonlite 16-Jan-05/9:34 PM Reply
intersing.........
-mega