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Loss (Ghazal) by <{Baba^Yaga}>
Something happened to me, but I forgot what it was Regardless of regard, love, warmth, vitamins and milk. Cigarettes and long walks through fleeting concentration I have an idea that what I thought mattered changed. I was brought up, and let go, I was taken there lacking And when bathing quit, sleep folded, and answers caved. People began to need more of what identifies them From their clothes, kisses, small talk, and sincerity. But the day I was born Nixon lied and Elvis died And all of the things I wrote my name upon vanished. There are pictures and sweet notes still kept loosely Among crenellated landscapes I recall out of habit. If I keep separating and dividing these variables Perhaps I will formulate an old way to feel new.

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Arithmetic Mean: 7.571429
Weighted score: 6.8798647
Overall Rank: 261
Posted: May 1, 2004 10:46 PM PDT; Last modified: May 1, 2004 10:46 PM PDT
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INTRANSIT, scitz

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[10] deleted user @ 68.66.196.168 | 2-May-04/9:16 AM | Reply
Very good, especially the last line. some will argue that it's not a ghazal, but I don't care, the thing resonates with me.
[10] INTRANSIT @ 205.188.116.68 | 2-May-04/5:35 PM | Reply
You swim so fluidly through the murky waters of your past. My past, not so murky, not clear either.
[9] scitz @ 81.130.183.10 | 28-Sep-04/6:48 AM | Reply
brilliant - and added to faves
[10] Caducus @ 172.201.116.253 | 11-Feb-05/1:40 AM | Reply
this is amazing, truly awesome.
[10] Caducus @ 172.202.128.95 | 11-Oct-05/9:24 AM | Reply
still brings a tear to my eye
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