poemranker ::Replying

ReplyTo a comment on Sloth and Expectation by ifni.

nentwined9 May 2002

this doesn't really catch me, but it feels like it almost did. I like the statement a lot.

for something so short it's really hard to make any sort of suggestion, but I think it would work better for me if it ended with expectation instead of warring -- "sloth warring with expectation"... separating the two more and giving it a stronger punch. maybe.