DoubleU19 May 2005

I meant in terms of structure. (Old-fashioned) poetry is balanced poetry, it has a rhythm. Reading it should give you the feeling that you are swept away in a dance. Not necessarily a romantic waltz! To me the perfect poem is the poem that blends traditional form with experimentalism. You more or less did such in your poem because stanza's 3-4-5 leave the harmonious form and turn into a report of an almost casual talk between two people. But it's the casual conversation that does not appeal to me.

I'm not at my very best right now, sorry if I ramble.