DoubleU6 Jun 2005

The problem with most writing critters (a Rockmage tone now) is that they write without thinking. Contradictions and pleonasms (f.i. 'tiny little firefly') can unintentionally turn out comical or ridiculous if they're not thought over by the author.
This one contains a contradiction, and it's not >>always forever<<. The contradiction is in lines 12-13 and lines 15-16.

There is a poetic thought in this poem, but not one poetic line. There's not one moment where I give a shit about you and your dear friend. You wrote this to please yourself and did't give a shit about your readers. Hence my zero.