LilMsLadyPoet31 Jul 2005

I am going to take the time, because I really like this one, so full of truths, and so naked you bore yourself.
I use to> I used to (corrected), the sparse use of commas needs fixing. It needs many commas, (end of line 2)and periods at the ends of sentences. "be held in your arms(.)" 'your quirky laugh'(.) or (;)
'love, that we once shared'> take out the comma.

'and wish you understood how deep it was'> and wished you understood...and wish you could have understood (?)...needs a change here.
The use of 'became' became monotonous, consider mixing in some other words in place of 'became'. ("I used to" did not get on my nerves with its repeated use, but maybe you could use other words in some places of its use, as well.> "I once" or "Once, I" "In time's past")
"and now, here you were"> now says now, so should be "and now, here you are", or change, to> "and then, there you were"

I was so desperate,
not to give up all those years > I was so desperate to not give up all those years. (take out the comma.)

became bitterness, and I feel alone> became/felt or becomes/ feel.
Drug became his mistress...get rid of "her" or him, or you will be the next casualty. (And maybe losing you will be the push he needs to get the help he needs, and Maybe, somewhere down the road, he will find his way back to himself...and you. Maybe then you won't want to devote the time to him, maybe you will. Take care of you...if you don't, who will? And if not for yourself, then for your child.)I gave you an 8 for content.