Tintagiles20 Sep 2005

Hmm. That's quite fine. You still need to learn about apostrophes, but I gave up on that years ago.

Seriously, howe'er... The second stanza is a bit confused. The first two lines are fine. Then the third: what's was laid on the grave? The buds. Do the buds make the graves fragrant, or were they already? Was the love born on/in the graves? Not that I mind, I've nothing against necrophilia myself... 'to die in her today' ... Does that mean 'Love was born/to die in love's today' or 'Love was born/to die in [graves, autumn] on this day'? Or what?

I really like the penultimate line, but the last one seems to let it down a little.