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ReplyTo a comment on Grieving by d35.

Sisterwolf28 Dec 2005

Some deep emotions here. Line 7 should say 'ground' instead of grown. The odd spacing tears up your cohesiveness. When you have good stuff to say, it
doesn't need a lot of odd punctuation . . .
A rewrite would be my suggestion. I would love to
read it if you do one.