LilMsLadyPoet3 Mar 2006

Oh! Call me clueless...sheesh...okay...this IS the 'other one' the previous one, and the other is more recent. To be honest, I like the (this) more condensed version...or at least the attempt to condense it, shown here.
God'swife had good advice for you, back then...hold onto it, and reread as time moves on. Rythm and flow are still things you work on. I can see from your other stuff that you are finding your expression, your voice, and your language just fine! I see alot of growth, in how you express yourself now.