richa5 Mar 2006

'Alas doing for the sake of bread' is garbled. Something like 'hanging men for the bread on my table' makes more sense.

'The justice perhaps may'- No 'the' perhaps and maybe mean the same thing (in this context) so you should ditch one. 'Justice may have a thousand reasons' would be more obvious.

'to make him stranglehold' should be 'to strangle him' and the man does not surmount the knot. The knot is atop him.

A mind can not realistically be said to be brittle because it is non-material.

'agonized faces many I have seen' should probably be 'I have seen many agonising faces'.