poemranker ::Replying

ReplyTo a comment on A Country Anecdote by Dovina.

Ranger3 Apr 2006

Ah, okay I see your meaning in stanza 1 now. Perhaps rather than changing the tense, turn 'I have a man who wakes with me' into something a little more ambiguous. 'I always wake seeing that man...'? A clumsy way of putting it, I know, but with a bit of refining it might work.