poemranker ::Replying

ReplyTo a comment on meeting her gaze by digipoet.

digipoet18 Apr 2006

thanks for the comments ... it is supposed to be a humorous piece about not being able to get it up. I did overuse "face" in the poem. The "parcels" of your face is not about computers or technology, but suggests that a face can carry a range of weighty messages. The subject of the poem is happy that condemnation is not one of these messages, but remains humiliated.

Maybe three stanzas would be better:

the parcels of
your face i see
reflect no condemnation

my meager rise
its ceiling low
falls short of inspiration

can Icarus
spectacular
survive humiliation