poemranker ::Replying

ReplyTo a comment on A Country Anecdote by Dovina.

lmp20 Apr 2006

poignant.

line 19 seems a tad too long, had to read it a few times and stick the "our feet" on the next line. i know it is an unnatural break in th line, but line 20 is a little short too, so i guess it helps. other than reworking both lines....