Dovina16 May 2006
Itâs much clearer now; I believe I get the gist of at least part of it.
I like the use of Cupid to stand in for agape love - that's a nice analogy.
"Arrow" is a bit confusing. You probably refer to Zenoâs arrow, a paradox where motion is rest. If so, then I think thatâs too distant an allusion to expect even above average readers to get.
The wrist nearly tearing is good because most people would say "hand tearing" which is probably not historically right.
Consistency of the apple tree metaphor: Crimson spheres are imaginable, but emerald-colored apples are not, at least to me.
I see other things going on here besides crucifixion. Iâd like to see them all tie together somehow. Surely, you wish to show how these things are related.