Dovina1 Sep 2006

Verse 2 is great.
Verse 1 needs a period after line 3.
Verse 3 could lose the quotes around his name, I think.
Verse 4 needs the space removed before "s" and a comma after "sick" and a period after line 2 and a period after Line 4.
Verse 5 needs an apostrophe in "mothers" and "Grandmothers" and a comma after Line 3 and a period after Line 4.