nentwined5 Mar 2009

god damn dude.

yeah, that's personal. and eloquent. and evocative--I can feel it.

The odd thing is I feel like it hits too close to home to crit, but if I step back a bit, it's not my home.

So: if I were reading this @ GUD, I'd be thinking, wondering... this is really beautiful. But is there enough of a story, enough of an arc, enough "other" on top of the punch to the gut and its beauty? And I don't know, there. I'd let it sit and hope to get some response from others. And I think the response would tend to depend on who read it next.