poemranker ::Replying

ReplyTo a comment on Stars In My Eyes by onlyontuesdays.

-=SeTTle=-11 May 2002

Decent image content, but it is wasted in the self reference. Try removing all references to yourself and try replacing the concept of (your) him with something like that-special-someone-we-all-have-you-know-what-I'm-saying.

And see if ending the poem with the broken lines from the center does anything.

And furthermore you don't love me, you're just in love with my po-ems.