<~>24 Jan 2003

very nice indeed.
this is the weakest point:
~
A tempter who could speak
without debate,
his opinions most convincingly.

How he would talk--on and on
incessantly,
~
ironically, the language is not convincing.

i particularly like the way you begin this poem--as though your mask is a stranger. it does feel that way, at times. remember that you are the fabricator and the fabricatee.

perhaps old age, and wisdom help us meld the two.

i will not rank until you convince me. nice effort.