lastobelus9 Mar 2003

Revise if you want, but be careful where you take revising advice from.

'couse, you could always take it from me: how 'bout "and rubs his emptied hands"

my beef is that I get the impression you want to celebrate some aspect of your old man, but you caricature (is caricature allowed to be a verb, or do I have to -ize it?) him too strongly for the celebration to have impact. If you follow what I mean.