poemranker ::Replying

ReplyTo a comment on missing time by Bill Z Bub.

david4 Jul 2003

The diction is mellifluous. I am particularly struck by the enjambment and how it seems to contribute to the overall feeling of how well-crafted the piece is.

The only thing I take issue with is the question posed in the ninth stanza. While the diction and intent match, it seems awkward enough there to interrupt the flow of the piece.