Caducus13 Aug 2003

Excellent job its not pretentious, and I think its very poignant (especially the end, so sudden and final). Line one is also quite a beautiful thought, a mental ocean, that one line spawns so many thoughts like clams, drowning in yourself, being consumed, blue etc,

This is raw and lingers, I have e0mailed it to my inbox (as i write so many death/angst poems take this a compliment) 10