nentwined16 Sep 2003

"the case of the naive gazer *is* aligning the stars*? or... the case? no, I just don't get that.

why a comma after hidden?

and a semicolon after swap?

and a comma after meant?

I think I like this poem but for its structure. or the punctuation. if you're going to have so much, why not actually match it up the way it's "supposed" to go? (or if you're tossing it in randomly, is that meant to be a comment on the stars? everything else seems deliberate...?)

6 as is.