SupremeDreamer4 Feb 2004

I like it- my only problem with it is the use of "thronging", which doesn't sound right.. perhaps

"enough to shake you awake, call it quits,
step out of the house into the [crowded darkness] (or) [tense {or hectic} dark]"

Or something, because "throng" is a verb; def: press tightly together or cram- which makes little sense, so I don't have a clue what you intented to express with its use.

I could be babbling foolishly, but an explaination would be nice.

Blessed with nine.