There are indeed, some spelling errors. I obviously did not check it very good. Sorry. *embaressed* -*lindsey*

A good metaphor for something, but what? I can think of several twists. As it stands, you only describe the dying candle.

Potter is overblown! A good way to get kids to read though.

hmm.

Amazing. Simpily Amazing. -10- *lindsey*

It's a funny poem, but metrically it ain't no limerick.

haha. Made me laugh. Quite the poem. -10- *lindsey*

I don't quite understand it, but I definetly sense the sadness

hillarious for such a solemn subject matter.

funny lot, them religeous

Note: since this is not a haiku in the traditional sense, without natural imagery, its only haiku attribute being the 5-7-5 syllable format, I decided to dub it a "Faiku". In other words: Don't bother telling me this "Haiku" doesn't follow rigid tradition. I am fully fucking aware of the fact.

You are a sad little shithead. A pathetic self promoter. It's absolutely self-defeating to anonymously vote favoribly for yourself, since it shows just how much you, as an insecure twat, seek to boost your esteem through empty illusion. Naturally, of course, your also a strong supporter of the politically correct movement, [PCM- a.k.a: Putrid Cock Mongers.] since you happily zeroed two pieces of mine- one which dealt with golden showers and the other which made use of the word "nigger". In short, sir- or rather should I say Child? You are a dullard who is found wanting. To me, you are the beetle I found crushed beneath my Jesus sandled feet. Good-day. Blessed with zero. [BTW: If it will assuage your puny ego, you can go ahead and zero bomb my whole collection if you like. Just remember to scream in bloody ecstasy "Hail Rockmage!!" each time you click submit with your molested shit-c-licker.]

Had to change the rather long and redundant title... Title still sorta sucks... any ideas anyone? Fuck it with a steel dildo in intellectual anathema.

maybe i tucked you in there i never did look i substituted you for other songs --I think you should cut out the 'I's-: might have tucked you in there.. never did look, substituted you for other songs --- Just a suggestion. I'm just biased against the word I.. that and when it's used repeditivly it rings of anathema going super nova in my rectum. Blessed with an eight.

Btw, a better title would be in order as well...

thanks. i'll work on that on the next.

can''t believe the truth is that fun

Did you write this after listening to radio four? they said something similar the other day.

-Fart- I'm sorry, did your rectal drip return? Or was that mine? I do notice a bit of shit dripping off your Gandalf inspired beard... Ah well, all is lost during a night of heavy alcohol consumption and self-loathing, is it not?

I loev it. And yes I meant to spell love like that... I was writing with an accent.