why do you only rank me zero, and give me no criticism?

This makes my moods change, I go from a worried, to a happier more secure feeling. I like this. Its a very good piece. My Favorite out of all of your work.

Oh no fuck head colin has not gone shit face, he has been away you cunt fuckhead wanker of a fuckhead bastard wanker.So bad mouth me you fucking shitface wanking fuckhead, with drivel such as this crap filled fuckfaced excuse for apoem? You have some fucking nerve you fucking wanker.

The last line is a little confusing to me. Blessed with seven.

Oh dear oh dear fuck face no balls eh? well well well, you crap filled fucking excuse for a shit filled fuckhead. Colin has been away, but now hes back. want to insult me more you moronic little fuck face? well? you turd filled scumbag wanking shit face arsehole, with balls to say anything when you think one of the people you have named has left? you fucking wanker, you are an over bred fucking shit with a braun fit for pissing in. Got the message?

Haiku don't tend to have many syllables to play with so I would lose 'you'. As haiku are supposed to have two intersecting images I would say third line should read 'a stone thrown' to seperate it from the turbulent heart fragile body image.

They are pretty godawful these towelheads. -10-

and another thing fuckface, my second name is douglas and so i use the name colin douglas as my name here and everywhere else, got it shit fopr brains, well? fuck head? if you had the bollocks to look up Dr Peter Douglas on the internet, you will find 3 of them. I have no idea which one is the person who came here but hetwo of them have photos. If you are allowed on one of the other sites i belong to you will se my photo wart and fucking all. then look up the othet two. You will see fuckface that they are totally different. Got it? so you don't you or any opf the other fuck heads on this ever call me by another name, got it fuck faced ci=unt of a shitbag excuse for a human being?

Probably. 'who had turned silent in order to achieve the illusion of Zen' amused me though.

and asnother thing you miserable excuse for a wanking sin of a bitch. My second name is douglas, that means i am colin douglas skilton, got it? If you look up as i did on the internet, Dr Peter Douglas, there are three people with the same name. Two of them have photos as i have on poetryshared, look at all three photos and cunt for brains you will see that we are all different so fuckhead where do you get off saying i am two p[oeple? well i'm waiting you fucking wanker. Don't you or any other of the miserable bastards that use this excuse for a poetry site ever bad mouth me again.

The brooding skies/ frowned/ omen. No no no. Overwrought and not in keeping with the tone of the rest of the poem.

They don't really get between your brain and cranium do they. 'Filling my vessels with silvery xylem' and 'My thoughts are wooded, my breath has leaves.' aren't particularly strong metaphors imo.

Not a limerick. A limerick would read more like: In Utah I was checked up and down by a sun bleached old mormon clown he wanted a wife riding a bike complete with a republican gown.

Wax isn't stolen by the air it is fed upon by the flame.

I honestly love it, very catchy. here's an 8, and a myspace add.

I think you were trying for 7 syllables on the second line... I think...

Believe me, it's over. Get over it, 'Meadows of owes?'

Marching towards my death. I'd much prefer this ending, simply because you, sir, are already Old with extreme Age. :)

If your going to do this sort of shit, why not do it better than the classic pimple cliche piece? Blessed with one.

The second line has 8 syllables. Cut out the 'I' and you will have seven as required (alone = 2 syllables). Capitalize 'I' in the third line. Also, this isn't really a Haiku in the traditional imagery sense. blessed with four.