regarding some deleted poem...	wilco 24.176.102.131	11-Apr-04/2:16 PM
That's kinda funny.
regarding some deleted poem...	Shuushin 64.223.163.177	11-Apr-04/2:21 PM
cracked me up.
Re: My Day Off by wilco	tre 147.9.40.139	11-Apr-04/7:22 PM
awesome poem, i love the line about zodiaz, he keeps pullin down my poems ;( keep it up, and dont forget to read mine
Re: My Day Off by wilco	Tara57 147.9.40.112	11-Apr-04/8:20 PM
I love it...sounds like a Streets song...I could read it a hundred times...also mad props on the Zodiac line I'm glad someone had the balls to stand up to him!
Re: The Stems of Roses by embersandenvelopes	Freethinker1602 68.48.30.210	11-Apr-04/8:23 PM
one question, why would you be lying under rose stems? I'm not trying to be an ass, I just want to make sure you aren't "having a rough time" and considering something dangerous. Intersting work though even though I have no idea what it's about I give you an 8 I'm on AIM at Impishkat
regarding some deleted poem...	dmb41 68.237.212.205	11-Apr-04/9:44 PM
Great song
Re: Rough draft of a poetry manifesto by zodiac	ggawrysi 147.9.151.22	11-Apr-04/10:19 PM
i like how most of your lines ended with a verb. at the same time, it was difficult and choppy to move from one line to the next mid-sentence with such brick like words. if the language was not as gruff and more melodic it would have flowed much better. the structure took me away from the content, causing me to lose your point. after re-reading it, i did enjoy the poem's notion of reform and losing older ways of life.
regarding some deleted poem...	ggawrysi 147.9.151.22	11-Apr-04/10:22 PM
tara my dear- wonderful imagery, lots of emotion, but the structure caused me to lost your intended voice. with a little re-structuring it could improve tenfold.
Re: One voice by tre	ggawrysi 147.9.151.22	11-Apr-04/10:24 PM
i like it as a beginning and middle- one more short verse at the end to conclude the poem would have been perfect. it feels like a distinct point was in the making but was left too subtle.
regarding some deleted poem...	dmb41 68.237.212.205	11-Apr-04/10:25 PM
i'm confused
Re: lost memories by ggawrysi	jsd 147.9.165.67	11-Apr-04/10:29 PM
Beautiful.
Re: "How Often, Under Starry Skies" by anastomosis	jsd 147.9.165.67	11-Apr-04/10:31 PM
As a philosophy major, I really enjoy the topic of this. <grin> Good job.
regarding some deleted poem...	dmb41 68.237.212.205	11-Apr-04/10:35 PM
are you okay? i think you should seek mental help. I dont know what inspired you to write this, but it's confusing. And with the Queer Test that you wrote, i'm starting to think that you're 1.) a homophobe who has issues, or 2.) a homosexual person, not that there's anything wrong with that.
regarding some deleted poem...	dmb41 68.237.212.205	11-Apr-04/10:36 PM
Rob Lowe? Really?
Re: short clip about dc, #2 by jsd	ggawrysi 147.9.151.22	11-Apr-04/10:40 PM
not often that a very short poem tells a complete story with a distinct point... i don't know, maybe cuz i live in dc it makes it easier to understand it. regardless, well done
Re: short clip about dc, #2 by jsd	tre 147.9.40.139	11-Apr-04/10:41 PM
very kool, i like it :)
Re: lost memories by ggawrysi	Tara57 147.9.40.112	11-Apr-04/10:41 PM
I love you...this poem is beautiful
regarding some deleted poem...	ggawrysi 147.9.151.22	11-Apr-04/10:42 PM
the last line makes the poem; it rounds everything out with a kind of "oh..." from me, the reader.
Re: self indulgent teenage-style poem needed to spew out. by Roisin	tre 147.9.40.139	11-Apr-04/10:48 PM
ive been thru this exactly. good job.
Re: lost memories by ggawrysi	tre 147.9.40.139	11-Apr-04/10:51 PM
i hate to go along with the crowd, but u deserved a 10...u surprised me. good job.