| Re: Cross Pollination by Jeremi B. Handrinos |
INTRANSIT 152.163.252.72 |
15-Jan-04/12:40 PM |
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And WHOOOMP!!!! There it is. the baby, off course.
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INTRANSIT 152.163.252.72 |
15-Jan-04/12:43 PM |
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Kale? Parsley? Lemon peel? What is a proper garnish for such an event? Prawn skin?
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| Re: Gone Away by ez2replace |
INTRANSIT 152.163.252.72 |
15-Jan-04/12:47 PM |
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Life can only get better in the future, but lives in misery. Hmmm. I'll get back to you.
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god'swife 67.73.18.73 |
15-Jan-04/1:00 PM |
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I confused about moose horns. The only moose around here ar e the robotic ones at Disneyland, and they speak English. Are those horns blown by hunters, or is that the proper way to discribe the voice of a moose?
I like the poem. I vote for 'soul' in the last line.
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| Re: Chodeling on my knees by Shardik |
INTRANSIT 152.163.252.72 |
15-Jan-04/1:15 PM |
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You're the only one I can tolerate this kind of stuff from. Poetry, that is. Is it? bivalve and arthroscopic made me peanut butter and jelly my keyboard.
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Shardik 24.126.112.80 |
15-Jan-04/1:22 PM |
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Garish, and prudent. Such as it should be when one is a man of the cloth, and altered.
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Shuushin 147.154.235.53 |
15-Jan-04/1:25 PM |
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Water and oil apparently do mix; welcome back.
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Shuushin 147.154.235.53 |
15-Jan-04/1:32 PM |
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"mad grey men
capped white with passing"
most excellent.
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Shuushin 147.154.235.53 |
15-Jan-04/1:33 PM |
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the line break conveys the length well; nice!
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| Re: War zone by INTRANSIT |
Shuushin 147.154.235.53 |
15-Jan-04/1:35 PM |
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Was there a preposition sale someplace I missed?
Cute story.
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| Re: Skull Soup v.2 by SupremeDreamer |
Shuushin 147.154.235.53 |
15-Jan-04/1:39 PM |
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I like it, with one small exception - okay two, but the second is more general.
The first stanza - mixed metaphor, I think you can fix it with removing the last three lines (and still completely retain the meaning).
It may be my taste, but I kept feeling like strings of words could be removed here and there, maybe 2,3 words in a row - to make the remainder more rich.
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fair12 66.84.225.2 |
15-Jan-04/1:42 PM |
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some of the rhyming threw me a little. Intriguing - sounds like a bigger story is left unsaid.
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INTRANSIT 205.188.208.105 |
15-Jan-04/2:22 PM |
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Other than the bumps, I loooove eeeeet!
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Shardik 24.126.112.80 |
15-Jan-04/3:32 PM |
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Did you scare the dark one away? lol. He must of scared himself away as usual. He's taught me a lot, I hate to see him go like that, it's depressing.
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Shardik 24.126.112.80 |
15-Jan-04/3:34 PM |
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Golden Que Tip Awarde.
This is the best thing you've ever written. Blew me away.
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| Re: The woods house by zodiac |
Shardik 24.126.112.80 |
15-Jan-04/3:56 PM |
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A cracking good volley mate.
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| Re: Skull Soup v.2 by SupremeDreamer |
imperfect_creation 66.141.119.208 |
16-Jan-04/12:39 AM |
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makes me think.... hurts... but i like it.
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imperfect_creation 66.141.119.208 |
16-Jan-04/12:53 AM |
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| Re: Keep it... or let it go by imperfect_creation |
imperfect_creation 66.141.119.208 |
16-Jan-04/1:04 AM |
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what is wrong with this... shit.
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Christof 217.44.77.166 |
16-Jan-04/5:06 AM |
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