Re: Da Ghetto by <{Baba^Yaga}>	richa 81.178.214.114	11-Jan-04/12:02 PM
Like it, think the end of verse one should be 'all fuckin illiterut' or 'all fuckin idiots' Like the sentiment of that line, rings true.
Re: lemuridae by richa	<{Baba^Yaga}> 24.126.116.54	11-Jan-04/12:04 PM
lol.
regarding some deleted poem...	richa 81.178.214.114	11-Jan-04/12:05 PM
Always like this kind of style, the rushedness of it all and then the final line that stops the poem dead. Doesn't need the lines though (that may just have been so p/r didn't get the format wrong).
regarding some deleted poem...	<{Baba^Yaga}> 24.126.116.54	11-Jan-04/12:05 PM
Woah, pass me a cracker.
Re: Malaysia by Crakyamuni	richa 81.178.214.114	11-Jan-04/12:08 PM
A furor like sedative? both words are kind of opposites. Likewise trust your belly button is daft. Other than that love the rhythm and rhyme (although to please the purists perhaps it should make more sense in places)
Re: Da Ghetto by <{Baba^Yaga}>	INTRANSIT 205.188.208.105	11-Jan-04/12:09 PM
Yes. I feel better already.
Re: What if... by DMonster	<{Baba^Yaga}> 24.126.116.54	11-Jan-04/12:11 PM
A centiturd.
Re: i am probably on my 7th shot of vodka by tralala42001	richa 81.178.214.114	11-Jan-04/12:13 PM
Not bad this, a bit short. Not enough for me to know what you mean by 'comforting touch on my breast' - is it sarcastic? I'm thinking so or do you like strangers? they are a stranger right?
regarding some deleted poem...	<{Baba^Yaga}> 24.126.116.54	11-Jan-04/12:20 PM
have you heard tom waites "what's he building in there"? you'll love it. 10.
Re: Watching by DMonster	<{Baba^Yaga}> 24.126.116.54	11-Jan-04/12:14 PM
Could you possibly sharpen a telephone pole into a giant toothpick and semi truck it through your twat?
Re: i am probably on my 7th shot of vodka by tralala42001	<{Baba^Yaga}> 24.126.116.54	11-Jan-04/12:18 PM
ha ha ha ha lol. This is some retarded whore shit right here. You're probably on your 7th cock sandwich too. it is the time to see the gynocologist fucking bivulvanating trollip. lol. I'll give a three for making me chuckle though. You've obviously never been to the big city doll. they do this 24-7, it's always the time. This sounds like some shit my rank mother would write before squatting on a donkey for a line of coke.
regarding some deleted poem...	richa 81.178.214.114	11-Jan-04/12:19 PM
very short, good nonetheless, I do like elongated poems. I think you get to feel the texture of words like cycloptic and billowing/ black better
Re: Audrey's poem by DeadtotheWorld	<{Baba^Yaga}> 24.126.116.54	11-Jan-04/12:19 PM
Didn't get through the first line, as usual.
Re: Nuisance by DMonster	richa 81.178.214.114	11-Jan-04/12:21 PM
Seriously DMonster, pretending to be suicidal is not cool.
Re: Nuisance by DMonster	<{Baba^Yaga}> 24.126.116.54	11-Jan-04/12:22 PM
If you had guts you'd gut yourself like a Samuari and shut your hole.
Re: Nuisance by DMonster	<{Baba^Yaga}> 24.126.116.54	11-Jan-04/12:24 PM
Your brains high on hamster. You obviously should pull a condom over your head and making a running jump for it.
Re: Waiting to live by singinkygal	<{Baba^Yaga}> 24.126.116.54	11-Jan-04/12:26 PM
Maybe you'll win the lottery! 0
Re: Malaysia by Crakyamuni	INTRANSIT 152.163.252.72	11-Jan-04/7:16 AM
The only thing I'd change is belly button. too silly for a serious piece. And generally speaking, hacks have no idea what assonance and alliteration are. Now tuck, Nip.
Re: A feast for a king by fair12	INTRANSIT 152.163.252.72	11-Jan-04/7:23 AM
"crying their history in the orbs of my eyes" Orbs bugs me. It's like saying the eyes of my eyes. Easy fix.
Re: i would have you by silvertongueddevil	tuthaliash 24.165.92.14	11-Jan-04/8:35 AM
This is beautiful...intimate and subtly sexy.