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Jeremi B. Handrinos 24.126.116.54 |
15-Dec-03/1:03 PM |
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| Re: The Thomas Brown Affair by SupremeDreamer |
richa 81.178.235.140 |
16-Dec-03/6:25 AM |
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quite funny, a haiku is supposed to have more depth though preferably with natural imagery.
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| Re: The Thomas Brown Affair by SupremeDreamer |
richa 81.178.235.140 |
16-Dec-03/6:26 AM |
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title: a dead man on being dead or confessions of a dead man.
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| Re: poodle noodle by calliope |
sliver 65.178.224.127 |
15-Dec-03/7:49 PM |
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Well at least he didn't bend you over for French poodle bred.
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sliver 65.178.224.127 |
15-Dec-03/7:51 PM |
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Probably not, only because you have no idea. Keep dreaming though, That's what keeps us alive.
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| Re: Me, myself and I. by darby pyn |
sliver 65.178.224.127 |
15-Dec-03/7:57 PM |
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| Re: A pinch from the snuff box by Jeremi B. Handrinos |
sliver 65.178.224.127 |
15-Dec-03/7:59 PM |
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sliver 65.178.224.127 |
15-Dec-03/8:07 PM |
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Louis La'mour? A map I would have saught. How ya been doin magus?
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Jeremi B. Handrinos 24.126.116.54 |
15-Dec-03/8:38 PM |
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I finished it, and that's saying a lot. lol.
The third stanza is the weakest, and ironically, that's what it's about. And since it's the crux that's where it should be the strongest.
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| Re: Me, myself and I. by darby pyn |
SupremeDreamer 63.93.107.164 |
16-Dec-03/5:13 AM |
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I learned this one when i was five. Blessed with 9.
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cleverdevice 212.219.142.161 |
15-Dec-03/7:50 AM |
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Kinda like my room, guitars and bed and all, not the cigarettes, or the supposed messed up head. I'm happy with myself actually. -7-
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Nicholas Jones 137.44.1.200 |
15-Dec-03/9:48 AM |
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This is even worse than Mud's maudlin classic - 'It'll be lonely this Christmas, lonely and cold.'
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| Re: high school tragedy number six by FreeFormFixation |
Nicholas Jones 137.44.1.200 |
15-Dec-03/9:49 AM |
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The first verse reminds me of the band At the Drive-In, whose lyrics are notable for their ragged, stream of nonsence style.
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Shuushin 147.154.235.53 |
15-Dec-03/11:25 AM |
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I get it, the box is a dictionary.
Good idea, needs more assembly though.
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Shuushin 147.154.235.53 |
15-Dec-03/11:27 AM |
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it at least passes the time.
a good encapsulation of a universal emotion.
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| Re: The ballad of woosie by rosiebailey |
Jeremi B. Handrinos 24.126.116.54 |
15-Dec-03/12:13 PM |
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| Re: Me, myself and I. by darby pyn |
Jeremi B. Handrinos 24.126.116.54 |
15-Dec-03/12:23 PM |
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That's lesson 1. Second grades over there --->
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| Re: Rebel Spirits by miraclemaker |
Jeremi B. Handrinos 24.126.116.54 |
15-Dec-03/12:25 PM |
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"fuck the pimps in striphouses
entrapping and stealing free
souls desperate to profit on
the exhibition of sexuality." This one's a bit off.
I believe there's more here at work than what you've given us, but the rest are tight. Here's a 9.
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| Re: high school tragedy number six by FreeFormFixation |
Jeremi B. Handrinos 24.126.116.54 |
15-Dec-03/12:35 PM |
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| Re: quickie by calliope |
Everyone 81.128.206.201 |
15-Dec-03/12:53 PM |
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Disgusting. Absolutely disgusting.
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