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16-Nov-03/10:34 AM |
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Beautifully put--I think that I may have been there a few times as well...
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16-Nov-03/10:36 AM |
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Makes a very good Valentine card.
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INTRANSIT |
16-Nov-03/10:37 AM |
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Topic-10. Rhythm-4. Poetic beauty-3. 5.5 Rounding up.
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| Re: Thommmn Thrrremmn by fatmansinging |
titan69 |
16-Nov-03/10:51 AM |
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this is the tops. what a briliant mind so sereal
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| Re: Thong Thoo by fatmansinging |
titan69 |
16-Nov-03/10:53 AM |
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love this one to keep up the good work
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| Re: Thong Thoo by fatmansinging |
titan69 |
16-Nov-03/10:54 AM |
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| Re: A song by fatmansinging |
titan69 |
16-Nov-03/10:55 AM |
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INTRANSIT |
16-Nov-03/11:03 AM |
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If i havn't suggested it already, Poetry for dummies is an excellent tool. not that what you've written is bad, more tools will make it better.
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INTRANSIT |
16-Nov-03/1:12 PM |
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very funny you hooven hooker you. it's good to be hooven. people like hooven animals. as opposed to hoover ones. Ha!
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| Re: Common ground. by INTRANSIT |
horus8 |
16-Nov-03/1:58 PM |
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Shuushin |
16-Nov-03/3:14 PM |
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This feels like a transitional piece for you; something between one style and another.
Stanza 3 is a joy.
There are a couple bumps that when smoothed will make this thing much better. "in to" - "toward"
"You desire" might be "what you desire", or "you're desire"
"drink my" - "drink of my" maybe
I like that last stanza too - I have a slightly raised eyebrow for "incessant" though... sounds too much like incest.
have an -8-
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| Re: Common ground. by INTRANSIT |
Shuushin |
16-Nov-03/3:23 PM |
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| Re: Common ground. by INTRANSIT |
Bill Z Bub |
16-Nov-03/3:52 PM |
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Shardik |
16-Nov-03/4:31 PM |
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One is never alone when one has the asses support of the smootheby bra. Let's see, how can I sum up this poem in a word? DRAMATIC.
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| Re: I AM... by CHUNMOON |
Shardik |
16-Nov-03/4:33 PM |
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The funniest read EVER! 10.
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<{Baba^Yaga}> |
16-Nov-03/4:52 PM |
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Sex has always rather bored me. Probably, because it's my profession. This does however read well out loud, and that's big tails on my little beasts. 8
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baphomet |
16-Nov-03/6:07 PM |
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wat the hells going on did the worst list and best list get switched?>
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baphomet |
16-Nov-03/6:09 PM |
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baphomet |
16-Nov-03/6:09 PM |
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16-Nov-03/6:09 PM |
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